Book Beginnings is a fun meme hosted by Rose City Reader blog. To participate, share the first sentence or so of a novel you are reading and your thoughts about it. When you are finished, add your URL to the Book Beginnings page linked above. Hope to see you there.
Beautiful Disaster* by Jamie McGuire
Summary: When good girl Abby Abernathy meets bad boy Travis Maddox, she resists his charm because he has the reputation for one night stands. Her keeping him at arm’s-length makes Travis want Abby even more. To get closer to her, he proposes a bet. If she wins he must refrain from sex for a month or if she loses, Abby must move in with Travis for a month.
This novel is a defined as a “new adult” romance. It is followed by a loosely linked series featuring the Maddox brothers, including Beautiful Oblivion,.
Everything in the room screamed that I didn’t belong. The stairs were crumbling, the rowdy patrons were shoulder to shoulder, and the air was a medley of sweat, blood, and mold.
The first paragraph drew me right in. I wanted to know who was narrating and where they were. What is going to happen?
The second paragraph made me cringe.
“Keep your cash in your wallet, Abby!” America called to me. Her broad smile gleamed even in the dim light.
“Stay close! It’ll get worse once it starts!”
Notice anything about the second paragraph?
Exclamation points! Five on the first page! Ten by the end of the second page! Fifteen by the end to the third page!
If you have ever taken a writing course, you know that overuse of exclamation points is a common writing mistake. Helping Writers Become Authors website has a clear discussion why you should avoid using so many.
By the way, I tend to call them exclamation marks. Maybe I read too many British mysteries when I was younger? Do you call them marks or points?
I haven’t read a good romance in some time, so I’m going to stick with it. I suspect I will not notice them so much once I get into the story.
What do you think? Do exclamation points stop you when you are reading?
Have you read anything by Jamie McGuire?